息子風邪をひく my son caught a cold
この日息子は風邪で学校を休んだ。
けれどむしろ、この半年休まず学校に行ったことをほめたい。
日本語日記
昨晩、息子が私を起こした。
すごい熱だった。
そういえば夕飯のときに咳してたわ…
すごく体が暑かったから水をあげた。
それで寝かしつけた。
英語のレッスンを予約してたから、5時になって、布団から抜け出した。
しかし息子は起きてしまって、「行かないでよ〜」なんて言いだした。
激しく動揺。
昨日寝る前に咳してたから、レッスンをキャンセルしようとしてた、
そのときは「大丈夫、勉強したかったらしたほうがいいよ」とか言ってたのに、なんでいまさらそんなこと言うのさw矛盾してるよw
大きくなったけど、まだまだ子どもだよね。
結局夫が起きてくれて息子を見てくれたから、レッスンは受けられた。
レッスンの時間について、夫と私がちょっと険悪になったのは、また別のお話。
自作の英文
Last night, my son woke me up.
He had a high fever.
Well, he had a cough at dinner.
His body was very hot, so I gave him water.
I put him to bed for a while.
I reserved a online lesson.
When it was 5’clock, I went out of the room.
However he woke up and said “Don’t leave me”.
I’m upset!
Before go to bed, I attempt to cancel my lesson, because I notice my son’s cough.
Then he said “If you want to study, you should do. I'm OK."
Why do you say it now, when you said "I'm OK"!
How inconsistent your behavior are!
He sure have grown, but he is still child.
By the way my husband woke up and took care of the son.
I could take a lesson.
添削結果
Last night, my son woke me up.
He had a hign high fever.
Well, he had a cough at dinner.
His body was very hot, so I gave him water.
I put took him to bed for a while.
I reserved a an online lesson.
When it was 5’clock, I went out of the room.
However he woke up and said “Don’t leave me”.
I was upset.
Before going to bed, I was attempted to cancel my lesson because I noticed my son was coughing.
Then he said “if you want to study, you should do”.
Why do you say it now, when you said "I'm OK"!
How inconsistent your behavior are is!
He had grown up, but still seems like a child.
By the way my husband woke up and took care of the son.
I could take a lesson.
My husband and I had a tiff about the lesson time.
It was another story.
感想
やっぱり時勢の部分が間違えてる。慣れかな、やっていくうちにケアレスミスが減ると信じたい。
このレッスンでは2日分日記を見てもらったので、質問ができなかった。というかとっさに思い浮かばなかった。
ケンカ、tiffとかの他の表現とか聞いとけばよかったな。
